domingo, 15 de noviembre de 2015

The perfect Cookie

In the summer of 2012, Susy´s family went to Austin Texas on a trip.  On the highway Carlos was bothering Susy because he was so bored and susy looked  so comfortable in her sleep. After several minutes the only noise in the car was the sound of susy´s voice screaming "MOM! can you stop this please!!." Susy´s  mom didn´t say anything to carlos, but her dad did; "Carlos, if you don´t stop bothering susana you are not buying anything at the mall, you understand?!" Carlos replied "Yes, dad I am sorry." The hours passed and all of them were so hungry trying to catch a store on which they can buy some snacks. After a while they found a little store on the country side that had a poster saying "Cookies 2 dollars each." Susy´s family got down of the car and walked to the store. There was an old lady about 60 years old taking care of her grandaughter with a big smile on her face asking them what they want to buy. Susy´s dad answer to the lady that they wanted 4 big chocolate chip cookies and a soda. When they get back on the car, susy thought of eating her cookie after sleeping for a while and she said clearly to her family "I will take a nap,  PLEASE DON´T EAT MY COOKIE." When susy woke up, she was so excited about eating her cookie, but when she looked at the bag there was nothing on it.

Susy was so mad about all the situation. "WHERE IS MY COOKIE?!!!!" she looked immediately to her brother and he was laughing, he said "I am sorry i will buy you another one later" susy was so angry, and she was right about being that  angry because it was the perfect homemade cookie. "Don´t worry darling, on our way back we will search the store and buy you another one just for you" Susy was happy about eating finally her cookie on the way back to Torreón.

A week later, when they were going back to Torreón they get  to the same road as when they buy the cookie, but the only problem was that they never find the store and they had to continue the journey without susy eating her cookie.

3 comentarios:

  1. Susy, I thought your story was very funny! And I like the way you tell it because I can hear your voice while I'm reading it. I found some grammar errors, mostly on the very tenses. If you correct those grammar mistakes and add a message into your blog it'll be even better!

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  2. Remember that when a dialogue starts you have to start a new paragraph. I liked your blog and I thought the title was funny. Check for spelling and punctuation errors.

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  3. Nice title that captivates the readers attention but check the verb tenses and correct spelling. Funny story!

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